The Ballad of AO
Posted: October 19th, 2011 | Author: Corin | Filed under: Comics | 1 Comment »OK, the assignment here was to do a relationship comic and use an unusual form. The spiral, for some reason (circling the drain?) came to be the form I chose. This is one of the comics I’d like to revise, both based on the helpful comments of the other IPRC Comics program folks and the sometimes-helpful comments of my inner critic. The kissing panel I’m particularly unhappy with–that is not a great anthropomorphic-cat-in-profile drawing. Oh and that should be “unbearable” in panel 9. Drawn around 10/19/2011.
It flows nicely, is paced well. If you revise, my only comment is: because the reader has to negotiate the spiral (which I like–though it sure would be easier on paper!), the less dense the info the better. It seems to get a little more dense as it moves in towards the center…